Patriarchal Norms

follow the intruction, I have 800 words already, i need it to extend to 1500 words As you revise, I want you to focus on improving your close reading and analysis of the story. Right now, your audience has a hard time understanding your argument about the tale because they don’t receive concrete evidence of the argument in the passages or in your analysis. I’ve provided more detailed commentary below: – Your thesis right now is incredibly vague. You stick on the level of theme: you merely state that LRRH reflects on gender relationships. But you don’t actually clarify for your audience what the story is SAYING about those relationships, and how that commentary might reflect or critique the values of its culture (in this case, early-1800s Germany). You need to state—using specific language—the argument that you wish to make, and then explain what passages/characters/literary devices you will analyze to make this argument. – How does the story portray female activities? You should quote the specific passage you have in mind to let your audience see this. Also, do we really think firewood fetching is a feminine activity? It takes place outside of the home, after all. – What does it mean for the mother to act as an agent in favor of patriarchal norms? Consider the relevance of internalized misogyny and learned behavior. – What do woods tend to represent in fairy tales? Are they dangerous areas? – I don’t necessarily understand the importance of your commentary on the woods scene. Are you suggesting that there is a natural division between femininity and masculinity? – You are trying to cover the entire story, which means that a lot of your analysis is underdeveloped. In other words, you are trying to do too much. You need to choose 2-4 IMPORTANT moments in the story and stick closely with those examples to make larger claims about the story and its ideological function. pick the story from Little Red Riding Hood: Cinderella: Beauty and the Beast: Bluebeard: As you revise, I want you to focus on improving your close reading and analysis of the story. Right now, your audience has a hard time understanding your argument about the tale because they don’t receive concrete evidence of the argument in the passages or in your analysis. I’ve provided more detailed commentary below: – Your thesis right now is incredibly vague. You stick on the level of theme: you merely state that LRRH reflects on gender relationships. But you don’t actually clarify for your audience what the story is SAYING about those relationships, and how that commentary might reflect or critique the values of its culture (in this case, early-1800s Germany). You need to state—using specific language—the argument that you wish to make, and then explain what passages/characters/literary devices you will analyze to make this argument. – How does the story portray female activities? You should quote the specific passage you have in mind to let your audience see this. Also, do we really think firewood fetching is a feminine activity? It takes place outside of the home, after all. – What does it mean for the mother to act as an agent in favor of patriarchal norms? Consider the relevance of internalized misogyny and learned behavior. – What do woods tend to represent in fairy tales? Are they dangerous areas? – I don’t necessarily understand the importance of your commentary on the woods scene. Are you suggesting that there is a natural division between femininity and masculinity? – You are trying to cover the entire story, which means that a lot of your analysis is underdeveloped. In other words, you are trying to do too much. You need to choose 2-4 IMPORTANT moments in the story and stick closely with those examples to make larger claims about the story and its ideological function. – I mean, the wolf consuming the grandmother could resemble the strong taking advantage of the weak, or the deceitful preying on the vulnerable. You haven’t necessarily built as convincing case to this point that the Brothers Grimm are using this story to comment on gender relations. You really think that the grandmother being a woman is the deciding element for the wolf’s act? That he wouldn’t have committed violence if it was, instead, a baby boy or a crippled grandfather? I want you to be careful of concluding “men dangerous, women helpless” in your readings, because I think it’s more complicated than that. – The wolf is literally trying to get LRRH into a bed. Do more with this. 14:31  Kevin Franklin read Nov 6, 15:33 lowest bid only read Nov 6, 14:31 As you revise, I want you to focus on improving your close reading and analysis of the story. Right now, your audience has a hard time understanding your argument about the tale because they don’t receive concrete evidence of the argument in the passages or in your analysis. I’ve provided more detailed commentary below: – Your thesis right now is incredibly vague. You stick on the level of theme: you merely state that LRRH reflects on gender relationships. But you don’t actually clarify for your audience what the story is SAYING about those relationships, and how that commentary might reflect or critique the values of its culture (in this case, early-1800s Germany). You need to state—using specific language—the argument that you wish to make, and then explain what passages/characters/literary devices you will analyze to make this argument. – How does the story portray female activities? You should quote the specific passage you have in mind to let your audience see this. Also, do we really think firewood fetching is a feminine activity? It takes place outside of the home, after all. – What does it mean for the mother to act as an agent in favor of patriarchal norms? Consider the relevance of internalized misogyny and learned behavior. – What do woods tend to represent in fairy tales? Are they dangerous areas? – I don’t necessarily understand the importance of your commentary on the woods scene. Are you suggesting that there is a natural division between femininity and masculinity? – You are trying to cover the entire story, which means that a lot of your analysis is underdeveloped. In other words, you are trying to do too much. You need to choose 2-4 IMPORTANT moments in the story and stick closely with those examples to make larger claims about the story and its ideological function. – I mean, the wolf consuming the grandmother could resemble the strong taking advantage of the weak, or the deceitful preying on the vulnerable. You haven’t necessarily built as convincing case to this point that the Brothers Grimm are using this story to comment on gender relations. You really think that the grandmother being a woman is the deciding element for the wolf’s act? That he wouldn’t have committed violence if it was, instead, a baby boy or a crippled grandfather? I want you to be careful of concluding “men dangerous, women helpless” in your readings, because I think it’s more complicated than that. – The wolf is literally trying to get LRRH into a bed. Do more with this. 14:31  Kevin Franklin read Nov 6, 15:33 lowest bid only read Nov 6, 14:31