[SOLVED] revise an essay

I don’t know how to handle this Writing question and need guidance.

pls help me revise this essay

there are The comment that my teacher give me

“You have an excellent paper that gives me the opportunity to help you: Your name in English would capitalize both parts so Kexin Zhu the title must be How Reading Changed My Life (the English rule for titles is to capitalize the first word regardless and then all of the important words (not usually a, an, the, by, at on etc) paragraph 1 not encouraged or promoted. par 3 most of my classmates. I could Although . . .looked . . . .that made me feel (for consistency of verb tense) collect books and hand them to the this position occurred when I had the opportunity (in English avoid using is when or is where) par 4 the first runner-up (no s) an Oxford dictionary (the proper noun Oxford must be a capital O par 5 to take any opportunity that would (I think an opportunity works just as well but do not know if you wanted any or an) from the several awards that I received (a ward can be a dependent child and more) that reading helped me to pass my examinations. Take your time, ask questions if you wish or need to any time–“