Rewrite my personal statement based on my draft and the material I provided

I’m studying for my Writing class and don’t understand how to answer this. Can you help me study?

Please rewrite my personal statement and make it coherant and specific and don’t use simple sentences, you can make up things if you need, don’t be too general in your expression, please be specific. 600 words is needed

You need to follow the following structure

1. introduction
2. academic experience
3. working experience
4. project idea
5. .long term goal-facaulty ( The school I am going to apply is UCL, University of Edinburgh, KCL, University of Manchester, LSE) (major is marketing, you need one paragraph that introduce why you want to apply this school)